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Domestic abuse and the results26 total reviews
Comment from seshadri_sreenivasan
Very simple but a profound message. Excellent writing which straightaway touches the heart.Domestic violence is occurring all over the world and unless there is gender equality and severe punishable laws this will never end. The art work too is very well made.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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Very simple but a profound message. Excellent writing which straightaway touches the heart.Domestic violence is occurring all over the world and unless there is gender equality and severe punishable laws this will never end. The art work too is very well made.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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thank you seshadri for your well stated remarks. too many times the justic system turns a blind until it ends the way depicted in thie poem.
thank you also for the compliment to the art work
lynnkah
Comment from Leenie
It would take too long to tell you my story. The coffin is a bit much, but at least I avoided that. I don't think anyone that hasn't gone through it will get the same out of this. I'd use purple instead of green. The words of Ms. Bauer are so true. Good job.
1.Initial impact-5; 2.Creativity of Presentation-5; 3.Color Harmony-5; 4.Center of Interest-5; 5.Technical excellence-5; 6.Technique-5; 7.Storytelling ability-5; 8.Lighting-5. Leenie
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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It would take too long to tell you my story. The coffin is a bit much, but at least I avoided that. I don't think anyone that hasn't gone through it will get the same out of this. I'd use purple instead of green. The words of Ms. Bauer are so true. Good job.
1.Initial impact-5; 2.Creativity of Presentation-5; 3.Color Harmony-5; 4.Center of Interest-5; 5.Technical excellence-5; 6.Technique-5; 7.Storytelling ability-5; 8.Lighting-5. Leenie
Comment Written 13-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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thank you Leenie for letting me know the right color for the background. i knew something wasn't right after I posted this and after a few reviewers mentioned teo bright green I had to agree that was it but didn't know what color to replace it with, I'm sorry that you were one of the many victums of this type of abuse, but as with my daugher you are a survivor. I too suffered from the hand of my first husband, but nothing like most have suffered.
thank you again leenie
lynnkah
Comment from Zilyram
I think the mixed emotions come across well. The placement and merge of the different components good. Not sure on the green it doesn't seem to fit in with the emotion. Yellow-green can indicate sickness, cowardice, discord, and jealousy which may be more appropriate than the brighter green.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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I think the mixed emotions come across well. The placement and merge of the different components good. Not sure on the green it doesn't seem to fit in with the emotion. Yellow-green can indicate sickness, cowardice, discord, and jealousy which may be more appropriate than the brighter green.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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thsn you so much Zilyram. After I posted this something didn't seem right,with another reviewer I realized it was the bright green but wasn't sure what color to place it with thank you so much for your help.
lynnkah
Comment from cleo85
It is a gripping picture and i get the story well. the face, the flowers, the note and the coffin are excellently placed and merged.I am not sure about the colors. The red is exellent. Besides being the color of love it is usually associated with high emotion, blood and even violence. The silver for the roses is a great idea, but the cyan green id a bit of a problem to me. Sure it draws the eyes; but it is to cherfull, to much hope. Green is the color of renewel, hope, spring, new beginnings etc. This green is for me the color of the survivor, not the women who seems in a hopeless situation. I have to think about the right color. I let you know.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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It is a gripping picture and i get the story well. the face, the flowers, the note and the coffin are excellently placed and merged.I am not sure about the colors. The red is exellent. Besides being the color of love it is usually associated with high emotion, blood and even violence. The silver for the roses is a great idea, but the cyan green id a bit of a problem to me. Sure it draws the eyes; but it is to cherfull, to much hope. Green is the color of renewel, hope, spring, new beginnings etc. This green is for me the color of the survivor, not the women who seems in a hopeless situation. I have to think about the right color. I let you know.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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I have to agree with you yet again cleo, seemed like something just didn't seem correct after I posted it but couldt put my finger on it, it's the bright green background. thank you again for your fresh set of eyes and insight. I always appreciate your help
lynnkah
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as always cleo your advice really is a big help. I edited the painting and went with a different background color. could you check it out and tell me if this is better. your advice really helps me to be a better artist. I really appreciate your help
lynn
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Always doubt what I tell you. Keep in mine that what I tell you are just my toughts and a very personal feeling. Because I am human I make mistakes and could be totally off. if you listen to much tome you will get a little Cleo, But what you want is to get a big lynnhkah with personal style. A picture has to feel right to you. You are the artist. You decide if something is right. If something feels right to you for the story you want to tell, go for it even if it is against some rules. That is called taking artistic licence.
The current picture: I thinkthe blue is to light, it's the blue of an beautiful summer skywith ewhite sheep clouds. Try to leave the blue, but put purple were the white is and bethween the blue,.Than look how you like it. i think the theme ask for darker, maybe but not neccesary muted colors [any colors] or even black areas; not bright cherfull spring colors. Try out black, red, purple as well or the angry colors of a stormy sky and/or ocean. Maybe it would work in monocrome?
Cleo
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thanks again Cleo
I don't want you to think that I am trying to turn into your type of an artist like you said LOL I do have my own style but a fresh pair of eyes are always helpful. In this particular one I juist couldn't see what I was missing. Green is my daughters favorite color so thats why I used the green at first was for her, but something just seemed way off. when you mentioned the color was too cheeful thats when I realized what it was. I used the blue this time tp darken the color but i was on my daughters laptop and she doesn't have the prgrams that I have so what was supose to be black is now white clouds. It didn't show that on her laptop until I reposted it. I just got out of the hopsital a little while ago from the flu so now I can attempt to fix those white soft pillows of clouds to the color they were menat to be. You are a big help as alwayss
thank you
lynn
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Hey that looks good; even the green. It dosn't overpowers the other items anymore. No, I don't think that you would turn into my type of artist. Your personality is to strong for that. I just want tell the danger of listening to me. Just always doubt what I tell you. I may be wrong.
Comment from jesuel
what a great piece of art the color composition is great the design is very creative and unique as well as executed fine work here
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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what a great piece of art the color composition is great the design is very creative and unique as well as executed fine work here
Comment Written 12-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2011
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thank you so much Jesuel for such a fantastic review.
lynnkah
Comment from TeenaM
Very good story behind this picture, maybe you should have had the eyes blackened a bit more. Really think the whole of your picture is a wonderful thing, but your daughter should do the painting, she's lived it, and needs to get it out. Just my point of view. Thank you so much for bringing this to our attention, it really needs to be out there more.
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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2011
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Very good story behind this picture, maybe you should have had the eyes blackened a bit more. Really think the whole of your picture is a wonderful thing, but your daughter should do the painting, she's lived it, and needs to get it out. Just my point of view. Thank you so much for bringing this to our attention, it really needs to be out there more.
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Comment Written 12-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2011
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thank you so much Teena for a great review. My daughter asked me awhile back to do a painting for this poem but just couldn't seem to get it right. I too was in a domestic violence situation with my first husband but nothing like most have had to suffer
thank you again for your great review
lynnkah
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You are so welcome, sorry for the pain you and your daughter have had to suffer, but, I'm glad you're getting this out with your art.